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An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What is the advantages and disadvantages?

Many schools today are switching from traditional books and paper-based materials to digital
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 as tablets and laptops.
This
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 change brings both positive and negative effects on
students
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 and the learning environment. On the positive side, digital
devices
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 improve access to information.
Students
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 can find a wide variety of resources using their digital
devices
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which
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 allows them to explore topics more deeply. Another benefit is that using tablets or laptops is more comfortable and efficient.
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 of carrying heavy textbooks,
students
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 can store all their materials on a single device
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 teachers can easily assign and grade work online.
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, there are
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 several disadvantages.One of the biggest concerns is
deterioration
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the deterioration
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 of
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’ health. Spending long hours in front of a screen can cause eye-related issues, back problems, and reduced physical activity.
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, distractions are a major issue.
Students
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 may use the
devices
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 for games, social media or some entertaining websites during lessons, which can reduce their focus and performance in school.
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 they are completing their tasks, a single notification from social apps can disturb them.Another problem is that not all schools can afford modern technology, which might create inequality among
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 from different places. In conclusion, using tablets and laptops in schools offers several advantages
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 as better access to learning materials and greater convenience.
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, it
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 raises concerns about health, distractions, and possible inequality among
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.
School
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 should strike a balance between these two options,
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whereas
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minimizing
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negative
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the negative
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 sides.

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Good introduction that clearly presents the topic.
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You have clearly stated both advantages and disadvantages.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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