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Band 3.5

SOME PEOPLE SAY STUDYING IN A GROUP IS THE BEST WAY TO STUDY. OTHER PEOPLE SAY THAT STUDYING ON YOUR OWN IS BETTER. DISCUSS BOTH POINTS OF VIEW AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

The world has changed
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 that includes how
students
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are
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study nowadays.Some
people
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 think that
studing
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studying
 in
group
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a group
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 is
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perfect.
While
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 others believe that
studing
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studying
 on their own is better.
This
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 will give my
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opinion
. On the one hand,Many
people
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are
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agree with
study
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 in a group for
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many
 reasons.
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First
,they think that
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it can
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develope
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develop
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students
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students'
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 skills.The
skils
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skills
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 are
communecate
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communicating
,thinking and
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studying
skill
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.
Moreover
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,it will help them to make new friends.Some
students
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 are shy or
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can not start a chat with others
so
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,
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this
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 learning style will be helpful for them.
In addition
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, working with a huge number of
people
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 can be enjoyable.They can do a lot of
activites
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activities
 and have fun during the school day.
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Also
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 some
of
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parents believe that their children will learn more when they
arestuding
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are studying
 with their
class mates
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classmates
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.
On the other hand
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, other
people
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says
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say
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 that
studing
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studying
 alone is the best choice to learn.They find
studing
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studying
 alone can teach them more.
Also
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,
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they
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 will explore things that they will never know.
Moreover
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,some of the
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middle-aged
people
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 feel shy and they are not social
persons so
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people
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,
they
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so they
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 can not
fouces
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focus
 if they
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are
 working with others. Adding to that,adults agree with
thi studing
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this studying
 style because young
people
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 will be able to start and end
studing
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studying
 anytime they want. In
conlusion
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conclusion
,I think both types will benefit the
students
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.But I prefer
studing
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studying
 with a big group
bacause
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because
 I will have fun and learn more.

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language
Make sure to check for spelling errors, such as 'studing' and 'opinion.'
coherence
Structure your paragraphs clearly, making sure each one has a main idea supported by examples.
task achievement
Include more specific examples to support your points, such as personal experiences or general observations.
task achievement
You clearly state both views and give your opinion at the end, which is good for task response.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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