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The table and pie chart illustrates populations in AUstralia according to different nationalities and areas

The table and pie chart illustrates populations in AUstralia according to different nationalities and areas
The given pie chart displays various
nationalities
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 that live in Australia
and
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table
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the table
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 shows the proportion of people
that
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who
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 live in
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city
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the city
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 and
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countryside
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the countryside
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Australian
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the Australian
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 nation accounted for over
the
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apply
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half of the
diagram
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diagram,
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whereas
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other
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Other
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,
british
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British
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,
chinese
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Chinese
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,
new
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New
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Zealander
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Zealanders
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 and Dutch were significantly fewer. In
term
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terms
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 of
areas
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areas,
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 all
nationalities
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 preferred living in urban
and
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areas and
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 only Australians lived more in
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countryside
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the countryside
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. Regarding
to
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apply
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populations that live in Australia 73% of them were Australian, having the highest number
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,
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followed by other
nationalities
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 with 14%.
However
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, British people were twice less than other nations (7%).Dutch, Chinese and New
Zealander
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Zealanders
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that
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who
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 live in Australia were below 3%. Concerning the location
99
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, 99
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% of
chinese
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Chinese
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 lived in the
city
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 and only 1% in
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countryside
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the countryside
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,
while
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 New
Zealander
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Zealanders
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 and British people who lived in the
city
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point
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 90 and
89
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89%
 percent and 10-
11
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11%
in
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countryside
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the countryside
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. The most
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nationalities
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common nationalities
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 that lived in the
countryside
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 were Australian and Dutch
with
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, with
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 17-20% and 80-83 percent in the
city
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nationalities, city, countryside with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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