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The graph below shows the average gross in domestic products in the wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not.

The graph below shows the average gross in domestic products in the wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not.
The bar chart provides key information about the Average annual Gross Domestic Product (GDP) growth between the 1960s to 1990s. The unit is measured in
number
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 the Gross Domestic Product.
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, it is clear from the graph that the highest Globalisers
in
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 both years.
Then
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 the highest level of
wealthy
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a wealthy
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 country.
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 what is shown, in the 1906s and 1990s,
the
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both the
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 highest both wealth countries and Globalisers.
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, the lowest percentage in the 1980s
of
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 Non-globalisers. In terms of

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