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Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's globalised world, some professionalists argue that after getting rich, any country does not need to boost its economic wealth, because it is not a vital factor to satisfy more their
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, I firmly disagree with
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 several reasons.
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 supporting my perspective, illustrated with relevant examples, before reaching a well-justified conclusion. The main reason is that economic growth cannot be predicted, and
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 a temporary situation.
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, governments should increase their economic level
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 without considering their existing position. Both America and China,
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,
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 have the largest economy in the world,
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 enhance their levels to compete with other competitive nations.
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,
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 who live in those rich countries want to see their country as the world's richest one, demonstrating as one of the major satisfactions.
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 individuals do not show their obligations about economic wealth, after experiencing any major incident,
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 as a natural hazard and political instability, they may oppose
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their governments.
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 some citizens have
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 knowledge about economic growth, most of the others do not react to current rules and regulations, but governments must boost their levels to enhance not only the economic aspect but
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 the social and environmental aspects.
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, a recent research study conducted by the University of Peradeniya revealed that after increasing the economic net rate from 7% in 2022 to 7.5% in 2024, there was an increase in
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 level of Chinese
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 by 8%. In conclusion, taking everything into account, I reiterate my belief that a
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 increase in economic wealth is a very important point, whether it is a poor or rich nation
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 to the point of view of
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's quality of life.

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You presented a clear opinion and supported it with examples, which is very good for task achievement.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic wealth
  • happiness
  • basic needs
  • well-being
  • quality of life
  • satisfaction
  • hedonic adaptation
  • social connections
  • community involvement
  • personal fulfillment
  • opportunities
  • leisure activities
  • psychological phenomenon
  • diminishing returns
  • affluence
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