IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The map below shows a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selectiong and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (MINH BUI)

The map below shows a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selectiong and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (MINH BUI)
Linking Words
This
Fix the agreement mistake
These
show examples
tow
Use the right word
two
show examples
 maps provide a clear view
urowed
Correct your spelling
of
 the changes that happened in the
school
Use synonyms
 over the period starting
from1985
Correct your spelling
from 1985
 to now.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is visible that there
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
show examples
 some
similarity
Fix the agreement mistake
similarities
show examples
 and differences between the
school
Use synonyms
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
 1985 and the
school
Use synonyms
 now
, here
Punctuation problem
. Here
show examples
 I will
mantion
Correct your spelling
mention
 some of them. In detail, it is apparent that there is a massive difference in the playing area
which
Punctuation problem
, which
show examples
 clearly
outnumdered
Correct your spelling
outnumbers
 all the other points by a huge difference.
In addition
Linking Words
, some new places have
abeer
Correct your spelling
amenities
 like
pool
Correct article usage
a pool
show examples
, fitness
center
Use the right word
centre
show examples
, and many
class rooms
Use the right word
classrooms
show examples
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, some things have been removed like the trees which
located
Verb problem
are located
show examples
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
 the middle, the road that takes you right to the playing
fieide
Correct your spelling
field
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, the library was
riplaced
Correct your spelling
replaced
 by the computer room and the Learning
resources
Fix capitalization
Resources
show examples
center
Replace the word
Centre
show examples
. After all these
changes
Punctuation problem
changes,
show examples
 the
school
Use synonyms
 population has increased from 1500 to 2300.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: