The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.
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people
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came
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who came
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into four countries as migrant
worker
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workers
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from 2003 to 2006, and for
2006
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2006,
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it shows
average
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the average
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number of
labour
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labourers
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per 1000
people
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.
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, the highest
mirants
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migrants
came from
the
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apply
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New
Zeland
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Zealand
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in
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on
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average, followed by
the
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apply
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Australia
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,
while
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the highest
amount
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number
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of
employee
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employees
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came from the United States and
the
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apply
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Australia
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throughout the period. Temporary migrants from 2003 to 2006
was
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were
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from the United
states
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States
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in 2003 with 577000
people
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and in 2006 678000
labour
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labourers
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,
while
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the lowest
employement
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employment
from
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was from
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the
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apply
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New
Zeland
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Zealand
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with below one lakh
people
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in both
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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years.
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apply
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Australia
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was standing
at
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in
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second place with 152000 and 219000 workers in 2003 and
2006
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2006,
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respectively, and the
united kingdom
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United Kingdom
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has
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had
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second lowest migrants.
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, looking at the average
people
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for
end
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the end
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of the period, the almost reverse trend
reflected
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is reflected
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here.
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apply
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New
Zeland
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Zealand
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stands out with
first
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the first
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number with
21.1
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21.1,
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followed by 10.7 from
the
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apply
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Australia
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,
while
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the US has only 2.3
people
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, and the United Kingdom holds
same
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the same
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position as they have in
migrants
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the migrants
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period, at third position with 4.4
people
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per thousand.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • immigration policy
  • labor demand
  • economic conditions
  • population ratio
  • increase/decrease
  • significance of data
  • country comparison
  • broader implications
  • host countries
  • statistical analysis
  • demographic trend
  • workforce
  • employment opportunities
  • global migration patterns
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