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Band 3.5

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be dri driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Vehicles
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 are evolving
in
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at
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very
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a very
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 rapid pace.If
evolution
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the evolution
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 of
vehicles
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take
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 place in
the
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a
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 similar
way
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way,
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 all cars,buses and trucks will run on their own
and
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, and
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 the people sitting inside those will be the only passengers.
This
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 essay will discuss the advantages of driverless
vehicles
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 and describe how
it
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they
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 outweigh
its
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their
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 disadvantages. As we know,the development of technology has no limits,it is becoming its best with each passing
days
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day
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.Obviously,there are some disadvantages of
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 technology as a
lot
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families
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of families
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 are earning money by driving
vehicles
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.
Also
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,
It
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it
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 is a risky work as AI is going to take over the responsibilities.Since
,
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apply
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AI do not have emotions,sometimes it may become hard to manage during
the
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apply
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unexpected situations. Though
,
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there are some disadvantages of driverless
vehicles
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,the advantages are a
lot
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 more.It is a symbol of development in the field of transportation
which
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, which
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 is good for the stability of
government
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the government
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.We do not have to depend upon
particular
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a particular
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 person as it is a
machine controlled
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machine-controlled
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 system.Everything will work on
system
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the system
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 and there will be no disparities among people.
Human
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Humans
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 are more likely to break the rules and cause problems when they drive.
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,though it is strictly prohibited to drive
vehicles
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by
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while
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 drinking
alcohal
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alcohol
,
large
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a large
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 population of people
violet
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violates
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 the laws
which
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, which
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 in turn
cause
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causes
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 a
lot
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 of accidents.The development of driverless
vehicles
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 will reduce
such
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 cases. In conclusion,
Since
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since
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,
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apply
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 there are a
lot
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 of advantages of
driveless
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driverless
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vehicles
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 government must be encouraged to give emphasis on
this
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 work.
This
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 will
further
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 contribute to the systematic and
well developed
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 country.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization of your ideas. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supports it well.
task achievement
Add more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. This helps to show your point better.
coherence and cohesion
Make your introduction and conclusion clearer. They should clearly state your main idea.
task achievement
You address both advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles.
task achievement
You show an understanding of the impact of driverless vehicles on society.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless
  • vehicles
  • passengers
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • safety
  • accidents
  • human error
  • traffic
  • flow
  • congestion
  • time
  • work
  • relax
  • parking
  • space
  • job loss
  • transport
  • cybersecurity
  • hacking
  • technology
  • trust
  • resistance
  • adopting
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