More people than ever before are travelling to other countries now. Why? Is this a positive or negative development?

Nowadays,
low income
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countries are
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on developing and promoting their
toursim
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tourism
industries . Some
people
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have
diffirent
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different
view
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about it.
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some
people
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think that expanding their tourist industries
bring
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a lot of positive sites ,
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others
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think that it should bring many disadvantages .
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,
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believe
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can be
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advantage
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. There are some
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about
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this
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.
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, because tourism has become one of the major
player
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players
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in international commerce , which
bring
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more superiority than other
industrial
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such
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as food production, garment . So that they can take advantage of
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nature
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beauty and landscapes to boost their economy, without spending too much money.
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, Indonesia is an island kingdom with poor farming
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and low technology
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tourism has helped Indonesia increase
GDP
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( GDP in 2024 increased by 25
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to
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2023).
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, when developing country are expanding their
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, they can give jobs to a lot of poor
people
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, especially in remote areas.
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, the creation of jobs for
people
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can
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massive migration to the city to help
stabillize
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stabilise
society . In
VietNam
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Vietnam
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, the fact that the
goverment
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government
invest
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invests
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in developing eco tourism in urban
area
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areas
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has created hundreds of thousands of jobs for local
people
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, especially ethnic minorities.
People
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no longer have to work far from home with
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income. In conclusion, travel has enjoyed increasing popularity in developing countries because it is a profitable economic sector.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion about the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Use connectors like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to improve the flow of ideas between paragraphs.
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Try to give more examples to support your main points and make them clearer.
positive
You have identified the benefits of tourism in developing countries well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordability
  • accessibility
  • cultural exchange
  • global connectivity
  • economic contributor
  • environmental impact
  • cultural erosion
  • infrastructure
  • overtourism
  • global perspective
  • socio-economic implications
  • career opportunities
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