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Band 2.5

In many countries, government spent a large amount of money on improving internet access. Why is it happening and do you think it is the most appropriate use of government money?

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In today's world
internet
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play
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plays
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 a crucial role in our
life
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 is one of the major
thing
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things
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 in our daily routine.In
this
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essay
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essay,
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shedlight
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shed light
of
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on
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how
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apply
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if
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whether
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 the government
spent
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spending
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a
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apply
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money
for
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on
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 the
internet
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 is important or not.
Moreover
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 is
major
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a major
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 in our
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life
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daily life
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time
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apply
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because it is
thing
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a thing
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 that you can use
it
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apply
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in your daily
life
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such
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, such
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in
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at
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 work,school and
contact
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to contact
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 your family and friends.
Furthermore
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 is essential to enhance our
enourmus
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enormous
life
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such
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, such
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 as improving my
skill
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skills
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 using
AI
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AI,
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rise
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raising
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 the
comunity
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community
 of people and
help
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helping
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the
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apply
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small
business
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businesses
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. In my humble
openion
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opinion
, the money that will
coast
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cost
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 the
goverment
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government
 to
spent
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spend
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 to embrace the
internet
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it
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apply
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will be worth it
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However
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. However
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,
will
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it will
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 increase the economic wealth and improve the city more and more.
To sum up
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,
enhance
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enhancing
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 the
internet
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 will lead the citizens in the city
a
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to a
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comfortable learning and
perfect
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a perfect
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 style of working.
Adittionally
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,
will
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it will
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 lead to
make
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making
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 the people more
enjoyed
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enjoy
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 during there vacation .

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly state your main ideas in each paragraph. This will help the reader understand your arguments better.
task achievement
Use more examples to support your points. This will help strengthen your argument and show that you understand the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and spelling, as errors can make your writing hard to read.
task achievement
You have introduced the topic and shared your opinion, which is important for this type of essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government
  • money
  • internet
  • access
  • education
  • resources
  • skills
  • economy
  • business
  • jobs
  • connect
  • areas
  • healthcare
  • quality
  • communication
  • important
  • friends
  • information
  • quickly
  • improve
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