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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

These days
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 many countries
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people
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, people
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 are becoming more curious about the
history
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 of the place where they live.
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 essay will discuss
reasons
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the reasons
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 behind
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 interest and by using which resources they do it. To examine the reason behind
searching
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the search
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 for
history
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 is boosting in real estate market in today's era. In many
places
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places,
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 if
people
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 find any historical
connections
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connections,
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 their
house
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 value rises to a major extent.
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, in Junagadh city
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people
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, people
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 living in apartments found out about having
old
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an old
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 which somehow went underground
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earthquake
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an earthquake
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 in 1999; their property prices doubled overnight.
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this
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, sometimes for the paperwork and renovations too
if
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house
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 owners know the
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history
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history,
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 it can be better.
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, to know culturally, and for knowledge as
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well,
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people
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 are spending more time
to collect
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collecting
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 details about
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house
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the house
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 and
area
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the area
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 they live
.
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in.
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 Surprisingly, in
modern
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the modern
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 world
for
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, for
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 citizens it is easier to find out about their housing and apartment.
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,
municipality
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the municipality
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 of
city
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the city
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 area usually keeps all records about constructions and
builders
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builders,
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 so
,
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people
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 can contact them if any problems arise.
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,
internet
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the internet
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 is
great
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a great
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 platform to gather information and websites like
reddit
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Reddit
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allows
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allow
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to
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users to
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 post personal experiences and get their relative findings
plays
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play
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vital
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a vital
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 role.
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, it is necessary to know
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history
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the history
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about
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of
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apartment
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the apartment
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 or
house
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 we live in as it can be financially profitable, and it can be helpful to solve many concerns.
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, it can be done by finding a reference of residents who
were
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apply
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previously owned the place or by using
internet
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the internet
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 as a tool.

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Try to connect your ideas more smoothly with transition words and phrases to guide the reader.
general writing
Ensure to proofread for any grammar or spelling mistakes to make your writing clearer.
task achievement
You addressed the prompt and provided reasons for the interest in history and how to research it.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in structuring your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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