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spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the changes in the number of reported
cases
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 of three types of
crime
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 —
burglary
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, car theft, and
robbery
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 — in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
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,
burglary
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 experienced a considerable decline during the ten-year period,
while
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 car theft showed a fluctuating trend and eventually became the most frequent
crime
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.
Robbery
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 remained the least common and showed only minimal changes throughout the period. In 2003,
burglary
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 was the most prevalent
crime
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, with nearly 3,400
cases
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 reported. It
then
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 declined steadily, reaching approximately 1,200
cases
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 in 2008.
This
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 figure fluctuated slightly in the following years but remained at a relatively low level.
In contrast
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, car theft decreased during the first three years, but from 2006 onwards, the number began to rise. In 2007, it overtook
burglary
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 and remained the most reported
crime
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 until 2012.
Robbery
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,
on the other hand
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, showed little variation over the decade. The number of reported
robbery
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cases
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 stayed around 700 throughout the period, with only slight fluctuations.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cases, crime, burglary, robbery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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