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The chart below shows the number of household in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011,2015

The chart below shows the number of household in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011,2015
The bar chart provides key information about annual
salary
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salaries
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 in
United
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the United
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 States, during 2007, 2011, and 2015. The units are measured in millions.
Overall
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, it is
a
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apply
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clear from the graph that the highest income was in 2015.
In addition
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, during 2015,
consistently
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it consistently
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 had the highest income,
while
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 in 2007 and
2011
Punctuation problem
2011,
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 both had the lowest salary.
According to
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 what is shown in the year
2015
Punctuation problem
2015,
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 households earning less than 25,000 to 49,999 almost showed an equivalent
in
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of
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 less than 30 million. Wild houses with 50,000-74,999 had approximately a fifth, but households earning 75,000 to 99,999 showed
insignificant
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an insignificant
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 decline. In terms of the
house holds
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household's
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 annual income in 2011, presented a slight decrease in 75,000-99,999 had nearly 13 million,
while
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 houses making over 50,000 to 74,999 remained the same
since
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from
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 2007 to 2015, in
a
Correct article usage
the
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 fifth
millions
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million
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. The number of families receiving 100,000 or more in 2007
about
Verb problem
was about
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 30 million, families with less than 25,000 and 25,000-49,999 are almost equal.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household income
  • income brackets
  • trend analysis
  • income distribution
  • economic policies
  • inflation
  • job market
  • notable shifts
  • overall trend
  • low-income households
  • middle-income households
  • high-income households
  • time periods
  • factors contributing
  • implications
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