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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Today, the
number
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 of international
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buisnesses
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businesses
 is rising
throuthout
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throughout
 the
enhancing
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emerging
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countries
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. The main benefits are an
amount
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influx
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a
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new foreign investments, and
evolving
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the evolution
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 of
assortment
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the assortment
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.
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, major drawbacks are
decreasing
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of
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number
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the number
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 of workplaces for local residents, and some
economical
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economic
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crisises
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crises
. The primary advantage of
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multinational
companies
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 is
increasing
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of
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in
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 funding that
promote
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promotes
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 to
develop
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development
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local production. Despite the fact that
,
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a
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developing
countries
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 have enough
resourses
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resources
to
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for
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 manufacturing
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such
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, such
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 as cotton,
corns
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, they are not capable
to produce
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of producing
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 products
due to
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the
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 lack of money.
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, international
companies
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 are able to avert adverse implications by funding to
establishing
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establishment
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factories
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of factories
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 with
a
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special techniques,
that
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which
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enhace
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enhance
a
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local
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buisnesses
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businesses
.
An another
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tengible
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tangible
 benefit is growing the
number
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 of foreign goods that improves the quality of
living
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life for
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 people in developing
countries
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. International
companies
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 allow to
tranfer
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transfer
commodities
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of commodities
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 from
a
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apply
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big
coorparations
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corporations
such
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 as
Iphone
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Apple
,
nike
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Nike
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 from
another
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other
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 developed
cointries
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countries
.
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, every month
1
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, 1
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million
of
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Samsung products
delivered
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are delivered
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 to Kazakhstan from Germany. The main disadvantage of
this
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 situation is that it causes decreasing
significantly
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 the percentage of workplaces in
developping
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developing
 areas.
This
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 is because
a
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multinational
companies
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 often take
to job
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on
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 their own specialists.
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,
a
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local people,
especialy
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especially
young
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the young
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generation
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generation,
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 can not find
a
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work.
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,
according to
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KRRN company of production
Asian
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of Asian
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 food prefer only asian
workrs
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workers
. The second drawback is a
tremndously
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tremendous
 decline in
economical
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economic
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 realms. More international
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buisnesses
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businesses
creat
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create
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an
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apply
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obstacles to
developpig
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developing
of
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a
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new local small organisations, which develops a competition.
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, it
also
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 remained that
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money of developing
countries
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go
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goes
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 to another fund. In conclusion, the growing
number
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 of international
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buisnesses
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businesses
 has usefulness like attracting
an
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apply
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investment and assortment, and
also
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 worse expose like creating
a
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competition and
economical
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economic
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 problems.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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