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The internet has changed the world. Some people think it has made life better. Others believe that it has created problems. This essay will outline the advantages and disadvantages of the internet.

The world today is very different, especially the
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, the
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 influence on
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 and changes, like how they live .
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big change in
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's investment.
This
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 essay will explain the advantages and disadvantages of the
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one of the best advantages is to look for information .
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, they can use it to search for topics related to their project and solve their assignment or homework .
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,
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 can look for tickets to the cinema or to book a ticket to travel .
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they can spend their free time scrolling
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, children can watch either TikTok or YouTube videos to have fun
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 , most kids go to spend time so that time can move .
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, most students have online courses to study at home
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 , studying from home can be useful and good for
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 who do not have money to rent a car .
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,the
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 has so many disadvantages
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 of them is that
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 can be addicted to it .
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 can cause angry behaviour and bad habits
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 it affects
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, children can learn bad behaviour and in some cases they will suffer from behaviour.
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,most
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 will watch bad videos on the
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 and become addicted .
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, the
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 can be used in the right way by parents watching the things that kids watch. In conclusion, there is no denying the fact that online is useful and it can change
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 in a good way
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 it has some disadvantages like using it to study and more

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task achievement
You mentioned both advantages and disadvantages of the internet.
coherence
Your introduction gives a clear idea of what you will discuss.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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