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The graph gives information on the popularity of three subjects at a regional university between 1960 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information on the popularity of three subjects at a regional university between 1960 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line
digram
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 illustrates the information on the
essential three
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three essential
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 subjects at a regional university during time of period
1960
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from 1960
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 and 2020.
According to
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 statistics,
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initially
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initially,
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 the humanities lecture was the highest subject
up
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, up
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 to 45
percent
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per cent
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.
Whereas
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,
the
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apply
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 Medicine was the
lowest
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least
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 famous subject up to 20
percentage
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per cent
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.
Furthermore
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, there is a crossing line of the three famous subjects that have been chosen by
student
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students
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 approximately in 1990.
Nevertheless
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,medicine and humanities start with an
escalate
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 static
conversely
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 to
science
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a science
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 lecture.
Moreover
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,
humanities
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the humanities
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 face a dramatically
rapidly declined
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statics
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in statistics
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.
In
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contrast
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contrast,
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 medicine rapidly soars a approximately
of
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apply
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a
decade
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decade,
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then
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 sharply
decline
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declines
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 and
be
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becomes
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 the same as science
precentage
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percentage
up
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, up
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 to 30
precent
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per cent
.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • popularity
  • subjects
  • regional university
  • students
  • enrolled
  • steady
  • increase
  • decrease
  • decades
  • least popular
  • gained popularity
  • surpassed
  • main features
  • comparable
  • steady increase
  • in comparison
  • number of students
  • highest
  • lowest
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