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Many organization and companies ask their staff to wear a uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? What kind of jobs should have a work uniform?

There is no denying the fact that many
organizations
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 have their own uniforms.
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 it is a commonly healthy belief that we're in uniform has a lot of benefits, there is
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 an argument that opposes
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 idea.
This
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 essay will discuss both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, wearing a uniform allows
people
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 to focus more on their work or studies rather than wasting time on choosing what to wear every day.
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,
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 will increase productivity and reduce stress.
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, uniforms promote equality.
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, when everyone wears the same outfit, it reduces pressure related to appearance, fashion, or income.
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 is especially helpful at schools or workplaces where
people
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 might feel judged.
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, wearing the same clothes every day makes
people
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 feel less creative. It is
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 possible to say that many individuals love to show off at express their feelings through clothes.
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, wearing
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 every day can be boring and repetitive.
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, the lack of variety in style and
color
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 might affect motivation. In conclusion, there are no easy answers for
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that it should be optional
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what to wear, because
people
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 have different personalities.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main point and supporting ideas. This helps the flow of the essay.
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Use more specific examples to support your points. This makes your argument stronger and clearer.
coherence and cohesion
In your conclusion, clearly state your opinion again and summarize the main points discussed.
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You presented both advantages and disadvantages of uniforms well, which shows a balanced view.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equality
  • socio-economic disparities
  • professional image
  • brand recognition
  • restrict individual expression
  • customer-facing industries
  • job satisfaction
  • financial burden
  • creativity
  • self-expression
  • identifiable
  • professional appearance
  • sense of belonging
  • corporate identity
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