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Band 2.5

he process chart reveals the information regarding the manufacturing of bricks.

The process chart reveals the information regarding the manufacturing of
bricks
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. By taking an
overall
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perception
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perception,
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 it becomes evident that there are seven steps in order to be successfully accomplished in the procedure. The raw materials which are needed to complete the process are clay first and most important step is to use digger to dig the clay and gathered ,
secondly
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, a metal grid separator is used to separate big rocks from small ones and put in the roller machine
thirdly
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, sand and water were added to be easy to control and shape using either wire cutter or mould. After that, the
bricks
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 are put in a drying oven for 24-84 hours.
Next,
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A
klin
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kiln
 was used for
bricks
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 to put them under different heat from 200 up to 1300
degree
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degrees
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then
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, then
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,
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apply
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 the
bricks
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 will be
under
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cooled for about 48-72 hours.
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, the
bricks
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 were packaged and transferred to the purchasers using trucks. All in all, it is
worthy
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 enough to point out that all the steps are mandatory for the successful completion of the product
,
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if any step is missed, the whole process will be halted.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to divide the process into clear stages and use linking words to connect them better. For example, use 'first', 'next', and 'finally'.
task achievement
Make sure each step is fully explained to show a good understanding. Add more details about how each step is done if possible.
content
The essay has a clear structure and attempts to describe every step of the process.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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