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The map below show the changes of a school from 1985 to the present time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below show the changes of a school from 1985 to the present time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map
illustrated
Wrong verb form
illustrates
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development
Correct article usage
the development
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 of
education
Correct article usage
the education
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insitute
Correct your spelling
institute
 from 1985 to the present time.
Overall
Linking Words
, it
clear
Verb problem
is clear
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 from the graph that the school went through development
mainly
Punctuation problem
, mainly
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the
Change preposition
in the
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 playing
Use synonyms
field
Punctuation problem
field,
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 was decreased
comparing
Wrong verb form
compared
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 to its size in 1985.
more
Fix capitalization
More
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 classrooms were built and
sport
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
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activities
Check wording
apply
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facilities.
Linking Words
Fix capitalization
Moreover
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moreover
Add a comma
moreover,
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 the entrance and the
exist
Use the right word
exit
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 changed to one gate. From what is shown, the institute in 1985 had
less
Fix the agreement mistake
fewer
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 classrooms and an office and a library,
while
Linking Words
 the playing
field
Use synonyms
 was the largest,
both
Correct word order
and both
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 the entrance and the
exist
Use the right word
exit
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 led to the playing
field
Use synonyms
.
On the other
Linking Words
hand
Add a comma
hand,
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 the school in 2015 demolished the playing
field
Use synonyms
 and borough more space in the school
,
Punctuation problem
;
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 the car park was removed.
Library
Correct article usage
The library
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had
Wrong verb form
now has
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computer
Correct article usage
a computer
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 room
now
Rephrase
apply
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words field with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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