Children are generally more successful in foreign language studies than adults. Thus, it is better to learn language in childhood. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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people should learn
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a foreign
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language
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in childhood, because most
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kids are good at
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learning foreign
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language
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learning in general,
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with
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adults. I totally agree
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on my experience. Generally, most
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children learn a second
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faster than adults. One of the most important
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is that they have more
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to focus on studying. They have little things to worry about
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each day, which
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plenty of
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to
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what they learn.
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, as a
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time
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student, they could
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and revise what they learn in
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school
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improve
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their
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studying
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everyday
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.
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, young students could spend more than one hour easily on
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what they learn, in comparison
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adults who need to spend most of
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every day.
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their spare
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, they have to do other things cooking or house chores
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, rather
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than studying.
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fully
occypied schedual
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occupied schedule
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them
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it
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really difficult to learn a
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systematically. To master a foreign
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is
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time comsuming
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time-consuming
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why it is
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to study a foreign
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as young as possible. Because people should spend more effort on each
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category
of
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as
grammer
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grammar
, speak, or even understand the
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background
stories. As a young kid, they have more
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training.
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,
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is common
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sense
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young age international students talk
as
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like
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native
speaker
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speakers
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, because they
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those
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expressions
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for a long
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.
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, the adult trainees
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difficult to correct their pronunciation or remember the
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grammar
rules, which
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their progress of improvement. In conclusion, young people have their
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advantage
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to learn a foreign
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. It is reasonable
that
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to start
to study
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studying
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it as young as possible.

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The introduction should clearly state your opinion, e.g., 'I agree that learning a foreign language in childhood is better.'
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clearer and more logical sections for your paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
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Check your grammar and spelling for mistakes, such as 'occupy' instead of 'occypied' and 'grammar' instead of 'grammer.'
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Give more specific examples of successful language learners or studies that support your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to connect your ideas more smoothly, such as by using linking words like 'firstly,' 'secondly,' and 'finally.'
Positive Aspect
You express a clear opinion on the topic, which is great for task response.
Positive Aspect
You provide reasons explaining why children learn better, which is important for your argument.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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