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The map below show the changes of a school from 1985 to the present time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below show the changes of a school from 1985 to the present time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
the
Fix capitalization
The
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 maps illustrate
transformation
Correct article usage
the transformation
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 of
Use synonyms
school
Correct article usage
the school
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 in 1985 and
present
Correct article usage
the present
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 day.over all there
are
Wrong verb form
have been
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 multiple modernisation changes
happened
Verb problem
apply
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in
Use synonyms
school
Correct article usage
the school
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.
Number
Correct article usage
The number
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 of students increased in the
school
Use synonyms
1500
Change preposition
from 1500
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 to 2300.
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Additionally
Punctuation problem
Additionally,
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 at present pool and fitness centre modernisation of the
school
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 infrastructure
firstly
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 in 1985, two car parks available
moreover
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 there is a road connected to entrance and exit to playfields,
further
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 more library took a huge space in west side it is adjacent to office.whlie at present no space for library it is converterd as learning resources centre,additionaly classroom 2 storey changes as 3 storeys building
however
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, entrance, exit and office remain the same place.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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