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Should homework be banned in schools? Do you agree or disagree? Write a one-sided opinion essay to answer this question giving reasons and examples to support your opinion.

I totally agree with the statement that
school's
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schools
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 should
be banned
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ban
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the
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apply
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homework
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. Because as for me, even if
i
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I
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 get the
homework
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 as stability in the responsibility
but
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, but
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 i don'
t
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 usually do my
homework
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. I had one older cousin who studies in private schools
and
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, and
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 their
teacher's
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teachers
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 don'
t
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 give the
homework
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 to their students. I find that
that is
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 so unusual for me as the
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student's
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students
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 who get a lot of
assignment
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 from the teachers.
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, the cousin's result
of
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in
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mark
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the mark
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didn'
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wasn't
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t
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 affected by the
homework
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 at all. Because the school don'
t
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 force students to study. They found out that the
student
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's curiosity is the most crucial thing in
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apply
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education. If they want to know something
with
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of
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interest
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interest,
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then
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that is
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 the case of change with the freedom.
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, I'm from
the
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a
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 school that gives so much
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. The students really affected
the
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their
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brain
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brains
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 the way of
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. One teacher can'
t
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 teach all of the lessons
same
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the same
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as
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way as
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 the
student
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 can'
t
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 learn all of them properly. The
teacher's
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teachers
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 know that, but they give
ourselves
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themselves
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 hundreds of assignments with only
one
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a
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week
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 deadline or something. Along the other side, we have our own family as
a
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 older sister or brother. We have the role of
look
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looking
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 after our younger ones. Even though
,
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 we have a lot of things to do.
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addition
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 the
homework
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 gives us huge stress and
damaging
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 our sleep schedule because of
deadline
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the deadline
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 of the assignments.
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, our free time is decreasing because of
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. In conclusion, it is
unnessecery
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unnecessary
 to give
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student's
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students'
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homework
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 as responsibility.
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, the mark of
study
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the study
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don'
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doesn't
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t
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 affect the
student
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's grade that much. It will be caused if the
student
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 has
the
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an
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 interest
with
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in
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 the subject.
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, how can we manage all of the
homework
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 along the side of managing family time and free time
.
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coherence
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and stays focused on that idea. This helps readers understand your points better.
cohesion
Use linking words like 'first,' 'next,' and 'in conclusion' to help connect your ideas and paragraphs. This will make your essay flow better.
task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state your opinion and outline the reasons you will discuss. This helps readers know what to expect.
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Try to provide more specific examples to support your points. This makes your argument stronger and more convincing.
task achievement
You express a clear opinion against homework, which is a strong start for your essay.
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You present personal experiences, which makes your essay more relatable and interesting.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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