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The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014 (in millions). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014 (in millions). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of money in millions donated by a company to six types of
charities
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 from 2012 to 2014.
Overall
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, environmental and educational
charities
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 received the highest
donations
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 over the three-year period,
while
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 animal welfare and
arts
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charities
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 received the least. There were some fluctuations in
donations
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 across the years, but the general trend shows that environmental and educational causes were consistently
prioritized
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prioritised
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. In 2012, the company gave the most money to environmental
charities
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, around 32
million
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, followed by educational ones with about 28
million
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. Health and cultural
charities
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 received slightly less, at around 26 and 22
million
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respectively
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, respectively
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. Animal welfare and the
arts
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 got the least, both under 20
million
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. In 2013,
donations
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 to environmental
charities
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 decreased slightly to 30
million
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,
while
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 education remained the same. Health and culture stayed almost unchanged
too
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, too
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.
However
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, animal and
arts
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charities
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 saw a small drop in funding. By 2014, environmental and educational
donations
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 went up again to about 31 and 29
million
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. Other
charities
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also
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 received a bit more than the previous year, though animal welfare and
arts
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 still remained the lowest.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charities, donations, arts, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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