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The charts show the share of global manufacturing and exports for four countries between 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the share of global manufacturing and exports for four countries between 2040 and 2060. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the forecast share of exports and global manufacturing of four nations for two decades from 2040 to 2060.
Overall
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, the service sector will be the highest prediction followed by manufacturing,
while
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 the lowest
productions
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production
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 will be
the
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apply
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agriculture
Use synonyms
 and materials for two decades from 2040.
Firstly
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, the services
has
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have
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 40%
in
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at
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start
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the start
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 of the
priod
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period
,
that
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which
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 will
be increased
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increase
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 by just one per cent in 20 years,
while
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the
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manufacturing will be on 31% in 2060,
the
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and the
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 same will gain 2% in 2060.
Moreover
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, the information and computer tech will be at 15% in 2040
and
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, and
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 that will be raised
with
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by
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similar
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a similar
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 1% in
coming
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the coming
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 years until 2060. The materials will
be increased
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increase
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with
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by
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 one per cent from 3% to 4% in 20 years.
On the other hand
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, the
agriculture
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 and
enrgy
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energy
 sector will
be
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apply
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fall by
few
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a few
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percentages
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percentage
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,
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points, while
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while
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 the energy will
be
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apply
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fall
with
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by
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 2%
in
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from
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 2040 to 2060,
while
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 the
agriculture
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 will
be
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apply
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decline
with
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by
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huge
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a huge
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 3% loss from 4% to 1% within two decades of the same period.
Furthermore
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, the manufacturing
sectro
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sector
 has higher chances of gain, where the
agriculture
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 sector has
highest
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the highest
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posibilities
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possibilities
 of
declination
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decline
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 in
given
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the given
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 time.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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