The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by people in four different countries

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by people in four different countries
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by people in four different countries
The table chart shows the data
of
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on
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consumption
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the consumption
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of three basic foods(
rice
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,
wheat
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,
maize
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) in a day in four countries.
Overall
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, Egyptians ate indicated highest amount of
calories
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in their daily intake,
while
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Poland
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was
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had
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the lowest of all
countries
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countries,
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mainly because there
are
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is
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no
maize
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in their
dietary
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diet
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. Specifically,
Cambodians
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Cambodians'
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dietary
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diet
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mostly consisted of
rice
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(1445
calories
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),
while
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wheat
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was the main ingredient in
Poland
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people’s food
with
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, with
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865
calories
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in it.
However
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,
rice
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was
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apply
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accounted
the
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for the
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least amount in dietary of Cambodians
with
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, with
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18
calories
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which
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, which
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was lower than
eating
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the eating
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habit
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habits
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of
rice
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in
Poland
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, at 19.
Maize
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, interestingly, was not consumed in
Poland
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,
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while
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it was the second most
calorie
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calorie-dense
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food in Cambodia. When it comes to Egypt and Mexico,
wheat
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and
maize
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was
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were
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the most consumed
food
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foods
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, respectively.
Rice
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was eaten in
amount
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an amount
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of 501
calories
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which
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, which
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was exceptionally high from
Mexicans
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Mexicans'
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eating habit of
rice
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which
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, which
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was 57
calories
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.
Wheat
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,
however
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, was genuinely high in
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the Egyptians
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Egyptians
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Egyptians'
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diet with 1029
calories
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a day
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while
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, while
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it was 275 in Mexico. Ultimately,
maize
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was mostly eaten in Mexico with 1083
calories
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, relatively higher than Egyptians which was 578.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words rice, wheat, maize, calories, poland with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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