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The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows key data on the demographics of four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table highlights major information about
demographics
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the demographics
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 of four different nations. In general , it is clear from the data that
china
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 has the highest number of population ,
whereas
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 , the UK has the lowest number of citizen , USA and Russis ranked as the second and third
place
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 respectivelly ,
According to
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 what is shown , the GDP has alot of differents among the countries , the USA was ranked in the first
place
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 , after that UK in the second
place
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 , the third
place
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 was Russia ,
finally
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 the
last
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 nition was
China
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. In terms of average life expectancy ,
UK
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the UK
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 was
rankd
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ranked
 first , the
second was
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was second
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apply
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china
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 , the
third was
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was third
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Russia
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apply
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,
moreovere
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moreover
,
China
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 and
Russai
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Russia
has
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have
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 nearly the same amount , in the fourth
place
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 was
USA
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the USA
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 almost 70.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic metrics
  • age distribution
  • urbanization levels
  • population growth rates
  • life expectancy
  • birth rates
  • immigration policies
  • economic development
  • geographical size
  • historical factors
  • health care systems
  • infrastructure
  • quality of life
  • proportion
  • population size
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