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the diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram illustrates the process of
electricity
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 generation from a type of coal.
Overall
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, there are three main stages involved in
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 process
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 mining coal, gasifying coal and producing
electricity
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, the process is a complex one, which requires much labour and
places
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To begin
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 with, once coal has been mined, they are
then
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 crushed in a special crusher machine. After that, crushed coals are delivered to the gasifier building by trucks. At
this
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 point, the next phase begins with gasifying coal by heating. After heating, the coal is
then
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 sent to the cooling factory. Before they have been cleaned, waste heat is extracted from them. The
last
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 main stage is to generate
electricity
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. In
this
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 step, coal is used as a resource in producing
electricity
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, and
also
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 waste heat is extracted. Eventually,
electricity
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 is sent to residential areas and electric stations to supply them.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Coal mining
  • Open-pit mining
  • Transportation logistics
  • Power plant
  • Pulverized coal
  • Combustion
  • Boiler
  • Steam generation
  • Turbines
  • Kinetic energy
  • Electrical energy
  • Generator
  • Cooling and condensing
  • Recycling
  • Electricity transmission
  • National grid
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