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The table shows the percentage of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone between 2006 and 2010. •Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone between 2006 and 2010. •Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides key information about the proportion of
people
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 who use mobile phones with
varities
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various
 advantages from 2006 to 2010.
For instance
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, make calls, take photos and so on.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that both in 2006 and 2008
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
people
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 who used to make calls
are
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is
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 the same proportion.
In addition
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, in 2010, the
figures
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number
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 of
people
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using make
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making
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 calls
were
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apply
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dropped
one
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by one
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 member.
According to
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 what is shown, in
play
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playing
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 games,
play
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playing
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 music and
recorde
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recording
video
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videos
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proprotion
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proportion
 of
people
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have
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has
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 decreased sharply in these three years. In terms of
record
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recording
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 video and
search
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searching
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internet
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the internet
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 in 2006, there
are
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is
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 no data
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, that
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that
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which
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mean
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means
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 there
are
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were
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 no
people
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 who
using
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used
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 it

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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