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The table below shows the hours of leisure time spent by people in different age groups in Someland.#14

The table below shows the hours of leisure time spent by people in different age groups in Someland.#14
The table presents the number of
hours
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 spent annually on various leisure activities by seven
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groups
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.
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, watching TV or videos was the most time-consuming activity across all
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groups
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, and solitary pursuits became common among older individuals. Teens and the 70s
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group
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 spent the most time watching TV or videos, exceeding 1.000
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 per year, making them the highest compared to all
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groups
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. In terms of socialising, teenagers and people in their 20s preferred socialising with 4 or more people, each spending 350
hours
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.
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 figure significantly fell in the remaining
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groups
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, with those aged 50 and above spending the least time, at just 25
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.
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, socialising with 4 or fewer people was more popular among older individuals, peaking at 300
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 in the 30s
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group
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 and remaining above 200
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 in the 40s to 70s
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 ranges.
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,
although
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group
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 sports were
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 popular physical activities among teenagers (450
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) and 20-somethings (350
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), participation declined steadily with
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 and dropped to zero among those in their 60s and 70s. Meanwhile, individual exercise was more evenly distributed, with a notable increase in those aged 70 and above (150
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), similar to teenagers.
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, going to the cinema was most common among teens (100
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),
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 fell gradually with
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 before rising slightly to 75
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 in the 70s
age
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group
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