Some feel that tourism endangers culture while others feel it is beneficial. DIscuss both sides and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that
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is the primary reason for changing the
culture
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of any
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other
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believe that
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culture
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plays
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an important
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role in
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. Personally, I think that
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is an
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advantage
for any
culture
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. I will discuss that in the following paragraphs. First of all, some
people
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believe that
tourism
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is
chainging
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changing
the
culture
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of any
country
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and affecting their original identity. It is noted that most of
this
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affect
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comes from
touriests
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tourists
feedback.
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, they think that food
culture
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in
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country
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the country
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can be
recognized
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recognised
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or
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criticised
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a soical
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soical
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social
media influencer
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youtube
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.
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, in many cases
people
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wants
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want
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to try
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type of food in any
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As a result
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, it is going to change the pattern of food
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and business in that
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.
On the other hand
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, the other team think that
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is supporting
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supports
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the
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, and it is used as a tool to represent the
culture
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.
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,
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tourists
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are introduced to the unique
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experience
in Alula ,
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hosptaility
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hospitality
, and the local dance
throught
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through
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apply
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tourism
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without
any
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apply
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adding or faking the real
cultue
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culture
.
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going to
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the
culture
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and make a lot of
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to
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Alula.
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, Many
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are still arguing
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the
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effect
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of
tourism
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on the
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culture
and the
advantge
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advantages
of
the
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tourism
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for any
culture
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.
Therefore
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, I believe that
tourism
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is a part of the
culture
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and it will never change it.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly presents both sides of the argument before stating your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas and paragraphs smoothly.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points, especially in the second paragraph.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion that tourism is beneficial for culture.
coherence and cohesion
The essay presents two different views on tourism, which is good.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural erosion
  • cultural homogenization
  • cultural heritage
  • mutual understanding
  • cultural diversity
  • preservation
  • economic incentive
  • revival
  • authenticity
  • over-commercialized
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