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The graph below shows the percentage of people by age group visiting the cinema at least once per month in one particular country between 1978 and 2008.

The graph below shows the percentage of people by age group visiting the cinema at least once per month in one particular country between 1978 and 2008.
The graph illustrates the percentage of people from different
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 groups visiting the
cinema
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 at least once per month in a particular country between 1978 and 2008.
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, the 14-24
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group
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 consistently had the highest percentage of
cinema
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-goers. In 1978, it started at around 80%, saw a slight dip in the early 1980s, and
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 to approximately 85% by 2008. The 25-34
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group
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 experienced a steady increase in
attendance
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 until 1988, reaching nearly 80%, but after that, it decreased to around 65% by 2008.
Cinema
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attendance
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 for the 35-49
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group
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 remained relatively stable over the years, fluctuating between 40% and 60%. The 50+
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group
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 had the lowest
cinema
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attendance
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, starting at about 30% in 1978 and gradually increasing to just over 40% by 2008. The graph
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 varying trends in
cinema
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attendance
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 across different
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 groups over the three decades.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, cinema, group, attendance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • significant
  • peak
  • drop
  • cohort
  • demographic
  • cinema attendance
  • percentage
  • monthly
  • age group
  • contrast
  • decline
  • increase
  • steadily
  • notable
  • highlight
  • period
  • consistent
  • dominant
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