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Some people say that it is possible for a country to be both economically successful and have a clean environment. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion

There
is
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are
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alot
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a lot
 of people
think
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who think
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 that it is impossible for a
country
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 to be successful economically and have a clean
enviroment
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environment
.
However
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, I disagree with
this
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 point of view. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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 I will be discussing why
do
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apply
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I disagree. First of all, having
good
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a good
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comander
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commander
 helps the
country
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 develop
in
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apply
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both economically and
enviromentally
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environmentally
. What I mean is
every thing
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everything
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 needs to be
leaded
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led
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 and when it is
leaded
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led
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 in the right
way
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way,
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 it will produce a great result.
For example
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, when the
presdant
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president
 of
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country
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the country
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 makes a helpful
disicion
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decision
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such
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, such
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 as
,
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apply
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 improving the
tourisim
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tourism
 in the
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country
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country,
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that
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it
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 will affect the
econommical sitiuation
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economic situation
 in a very good way.
As well as
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,
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apply
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 providing other
countries
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countries'
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 needs and making good deals
increase
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increases
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 the economy in the
country
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. Second of all, having a clean
enviroment
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environment
 is not
smothing
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something
 optional, it is a must. In
fact
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fact,
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 the
enviromintal
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environmental
 pollution is
widly
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widely
 moving nowadays.
In addition
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, it affects the
qualitiy
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quality
 of living in the
country
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 .
That
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 why it should be a main problem not only in one
country
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 but in the whole world.
Thats
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That's
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 why it should be very possible and
neccesary
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necessary
 for all
countrie
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countries
 to succeed in improving the
enviromental sitiuation
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environmental situation
.
Finally
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, with all of the problems that
happening
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are happening
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 around the world and the wars, every
country
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 needs to provide good lives for
thier
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their
 citizens and take it as a lesson that ignoring their needs could cause a huge
truble
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trouble
.
Therefore
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, having
good
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a good
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country
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 depends on both leaders and
citizens
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citizens,
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thats
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that's
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 why being a good leader
include
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includes
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 having good citizens. In conclusion, it is very important for all countries to be
succes in
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successful
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 both economically and
enviromentally
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environmentally
. For making people's lives better without any
pollutions
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pollution
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 and for improving the countries and the whole world.

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Task Achievement
Try to use clearer and simpler sentences to explain your ideas better.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. This will help your essay be easier to read.
Task Achievement
You show a strong opinion about the topic and back it up with reasons.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economically successful
  • Clean environment
  • Sustainable practices
  • Green technologies
  • Eco-tourism
  • Healthier workforce
  • Healthcare costs
  • Short-term economic growth
  • Profit over environment
  • Heavy industries
  • Developing countries
  • Sacrifice
  • Economic development
  • Transitioning
  • Balance
  • Sustainable development
  • International cooperation
  • Incentivize
  • Eco-friendly business practices
  • Investment in education
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