The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in !950 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in !950 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in !950 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps
illustrates
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
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the changes of a particular beachfront area in Australia between 1950 and the present time.
Overall
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,
while
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some facilities,
such
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as
Lighthouse
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the Lighthouse
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, pavilion and dining area, remained unchanged, all other amenities experienced significant changes
,
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. Additionally
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additionally
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, new facilities have been added over the period.
To begin
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with, the main road has been extended to reach the lighthouse.
Additionally
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, there
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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only one car park
at the end
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of the street in 1950
,
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apply
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, after decades, another park has been placed beside the road, where was previously occupied by playground. There were two
same
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identical
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swimming pools along the beach;
however
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, one of them
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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was far away from the
lighthouse
Punctuation problem
lighthouse,
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has been expanded.
Reagrding
Correct your spelling
Regarding
new facilities, two surd clubs have been
constracted
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constructed
in
Change preposition
on
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two different
side
Fix the agreement mistake
sides
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of
this
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place.
Moreover
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, a huge restaurant has been contracted next to the biggest pool.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • beachfront
  • area
  • natural
  • buildings
  • changed
  • constructions
  • hotels
  • apartments
  • park
  • replaced
  • commercial
  • trees
  • green spaces
  • decreased
  • development
  • access
  • paths
  • roads
  • natural beauty
  • affected
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