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The map shows the present layout of an post building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The map shows the present layout of an post building and plans for its future redevelopment.
The given illustration depicts the comparison of the future development of a post building with its current layout.
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, it is clearly seen that
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 the
area
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 will undergo significant modernisation, including the addition of a meeting
area
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, some seating areas, and a coffee machine, the removal of grass fields, and the replacement of the office locations. In detail, the main entrance, located on the southern
side
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, will be relocated to the southern centre, by shifting right
side
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.
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, the building has four office blocks, which are located in the south of the
area
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, but, in the future,
two
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 offices are expected to be replaced
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 the kitchen and the canteen, moving to the northern
side
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.
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, there are
two
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 grass fields in the both sides of the building,
however
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, those
two
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 places is planned to be allocated to an outdoor seating
area
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 and a meeting
area
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 with a coffee machine
area
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 in the left and right handed
side
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, respectively,
whereas
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two
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 additional chairs will be introduced in the south of the both grass areas.
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,
while
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 the location of the store room, next to the canteen, will be unchanged, the WCs
area
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 is expected to be relocated to the north-east corner of the building.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, side, two with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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