IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

1.You would like to invite your friend from abroad to a public event in your country. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter odescribe the public event oexplain why you think he/she would like the event owrite how you can help your friend with accommodation

Dear
priya
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Priya
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, I'm writing
this
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 letter to you to invite you
at
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to
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the dheea
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dheea
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Dheea
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 festival
which
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, which
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 will
celebrate
Wrong verb form
be celebrated
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 in India next month. I knew that you're on vacation right now and planning to come
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to india
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india
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India
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 soon . You're the person who is fond of
dance
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dancing
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,
sing
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singing
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 and
doing gossip
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gossiping
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. My village's head will arrange an event for girls only for the get-together of all new and old friends. In
this
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event
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event,
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 you already know we
did
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apply
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enjoyed
a
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it a
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lot
last
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time
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.
This
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time
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 there are a lot of new things and activities will
add
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be added
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in
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to
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this
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 function
like
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, like
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 performances of big singers , different
kind
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kinds
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 of Punjabi plays and cuisine are included and for children
especially
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, especially
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variety
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a variety
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 of swings installed. I wanna spend some quality
time
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 with you
and
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, and
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this
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 is the best function ever
where
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, where
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 we can sit and talk for a long
time
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 . If you're
interested
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interested,
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then
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response
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respond
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me
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to me
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 , I'll send you details of
venue
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the venue
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. Yours faithfully Mannu

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task achievement
Make sure to use correct spelling for names/events, like 'Dheea Festival'.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas clearly. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
task achievement
Use full sentences for a more formal tone, especially in invitations.
tone
You have a warm and friendly tone throughout the letter.
content
You explained the event and activities well, making it interesting for your friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public event
  • cultural festival
  • annual
  • spectacular
  • performance
  • exhibition
  • recurring event
  • one-time occasion
  • attraction
  • highlight
  • interest
  • hobby
  • unique experience
  • local culture
  • accommodation
  • stay
  • recommend
  • bookings
  • transportation
  • guided tour
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