The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.

The floor plans illustrate the comparison of the ground floor library in 2001 and its redecoration in 2009.
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the digital facilities and librarian’s desk remained unchanged, the library underwent significant changes by 2009, particularly with the addition of new book genres and facilities. In 2001, the librarian’s desk was situated directly opposite the entrance. There were only three book genres available, with self-help and history located next to each other in the western part of the room,
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fiction occupied the northernmost area. The films and DVDs section stood opposite the history section, separated by a group of
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in the centre. The computers were
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near the Films and DVDs section. By 2009, major transformations had occurred. All book stacks were reorganised along the western side, now including three additional genres (kitchen, economics, and law), bringing the total to six sections. The former fiction area had been replaced by additional
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the original eight small
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in the centre were replaced by four longer ones. A children’s area was created between the new and existing
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, providing a dedicated space for young readers.

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Make sure to include a clear overall summary statement in your introduction. It helps the reader understand the main changes quickly.
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You could improve the flow of your writing by using more linking words, such as 'however', 'in addition', and 'on the other hand'.
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Include some more details about the changes in layout or the reason behind adding new areas. It adds depth to your descriptions.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and a logical progression of ideas.
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Good effort in describing the changes with specific examples, like the addition of new book genres.

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