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In the future it may be necessary for us to live on another planets. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now researching planets that could be a possible home, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think we should spend money now to research other planets like Mars because one day we might need to live there. In my opinion, I agree to some extent, but I believe we should focus more on solving Earth’s problems first. In
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 writing, I will explain my reasons and give examples. First of all, it is true that space research can help us prepare for the future.
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, if Earth becomes too polluted or overpopulated, we might need another place to live.
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 shows that exploring planets like Mars is important for long-term survival.
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, there are still many problems on Earth that need our attention.
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, millions of people don’t have clean water, good healthcare, or safe homes.
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 people suffer here is not the best idea. In conclusion, I think it is a good idea to research space, but we should not forget the serious issues we have on Earth. A balance between helping our planet and exploring new ones is the best solution.

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Use linking words to connect your points more smoothly, like 'however', 'furthermore', and 'for example'.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extraterrestrial colonization
  • space exploration
  • technological innovation
  • sustainable living
  • environmental degradation
  • celestial bodies
  • astrobiology
  • international collaboration
  • economic stimulus
  • STEM education
  • overpopulation
  • resource depletion
  • scientific discovery
  • habitable planets
  • space research funding
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