Some people believe that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, think that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are needed. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In recent years, the availability of public facilities has been considered a key factor in improving general welfare.
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some argue that increasing the number of facilities is the best way to enhance public health, others believe
this
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approach may have negative consequences and that additional factors should be considered. In my opinion, expanding facilities is crucial for promoting public health and ensuring long-term safety.

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Your introduction is clear and sets the stage for your argument.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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