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Indivituals can do nothing to improve the environment; others believe only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is commonly argued that individuals can do nothing
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 improve the environment,
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 believe only
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 and large
companies
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 can make a difference. Personally, I completely disagree with
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 view for a variety of reasons. I believe that
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 can do to improve the
environments
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. It is because individual activities are better than
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 and large
companies
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 because individual activities bring many benefits. When big
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 want input on how to solve pollution problems, they want individual input, not the input of an
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 or group.
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, individual actions are not limited to consumption habits. They extend to advocacy, volunteering, and community engagement. Citizens can lobby their elected officials, participate in environmental clean-up campaigns, or educate their peers. These grassroots movements often provide the necessary public pressure and support for
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 and corporations to implement ambitious environmental goals. Without individual awareness and commitment, even the best top-down policies might struggle to gain traction or enforcement, just like the government said that if they want to switch from gasoline cars to electric cars, they have to ask the people, not
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 or
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. In conclusion,
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 the macro-level influence of
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 and large
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 is critical for systemic environmental improvements, it is a fallacy to assume that individuals are powerless. The aggregated effect of conscious individual choices,
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 their role in shaping societal norms and political will, forms an essential pillar of environmental protection. True progress requires a collaborative effort where individuals, corporations, and
governments
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fulfill
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 their respective responsibilities in safeguarding our planet

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language
Improve subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'individuals can do to improve' should be 'individuals can do a lot to improve'). Also, check for plural forms and articles.
content
Try to provide more specific examples and details about how individuals can make a difference in the environment.
coherence
Ensure smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance the flow.
conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reinforces the importance of individuals in environmental protection.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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