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Public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free for people who use it. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

Recently, some people think that general transportation should be funded by the government. They should allocate a portion of their money for the free transport , so it can be free for the people .
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, I personally agree with that opinion , since it should be one of the citizens' privileges,
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 it can help solve the environmental pollution issues.
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 with, every citizens have the right to access public transport, because they are paying taxes which should involve general services
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 as free transport,
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, in Saudi Arabia citizens get free tickets for general services and free transportation one of them, as their government believe that every person lives their has the right to access to these things as long as they paying their taxes Another point is that system transits can contribute effectively in mitigating large carbon emissions, as long as these transits are available at. a free price, it will lower petrol car users, because they will not need them anymore.
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,a recent study shows that countries with free privileges release carbon emissions lower than countries that don't provide it,
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also
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which also
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that
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implies that
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 imply simultaneously with petrol car users In conclusion, system transits should be free, as it is a main right for individuals because of the monthly fees they pay. Another
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that
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 it can
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 decrease CO2 emissions simultaneously with the effect of
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apply
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global warming , which will solve the pollution of the environment

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your ideas are clear and well-organized. Each paragraph should have a main point and stick to it. Clearly connect ideas together.
task achievement
Expand your reasons. Explain why free transport is a right and why it helps the environment in more detail.
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Use examples that are more varied and explain them more. Showing different views can help your argument.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic and presents a clear opinion about public transport funding.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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