The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two provided maps present information about changes in the Beachwood
Farm
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from 1950 to now.
Overall
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, radical transformations have occurred in a place of sheep, where new amenities have been constructed in there. Looking at the details, some facilities, namely the fruit trees near the road, the soft fruits, and the land for vegetables, have remained unchanged in recent years
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however
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, a
farm
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shop was built on the area of fruit trees, located on its right side.
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, a farmhouse and a chicken's nest were
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left untouched.
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, there were notable changes in the Beechwood
Farm
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's road systems by which were transformed via a replacement of the track.
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a
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barn was relocated to the two short ends of the road, and
then
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holiday cottages were constructed in its previous location.
Following
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this
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, a significant change in using electricity has appeared by constructing new solar panels on the bottom-right corner of the map.
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, there were two parking areas: one of which was located just over the solar panels, and the other one was positioned near the
farm
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shop. It
also
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mentions that a camping field was built by demolishing the sheep area.

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task achievement
Your essay provides a summary of the changes, but try to better describe the overall changes and link ideas more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
To improve coherence, use clear linking words to show how one idea relates to another.
coherence and cohesion
Organize paragraphs better. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea to make it easier for the reader to follow your points.
task achievement
Try to use more specific details to support your points; give examples when you mention changes, like sizes or numbers if possible.
task achievement
You clearly identify some changes and remain focused on the topic throughout.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a suitable introduction and conclusion which helps the reader understand the structure.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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