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Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time, classroom teachers will be totally substituted by technology. Do you agree or disagree?

Technology
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 is becoming steady worldwide.
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 creates a discussion that, in the fullness of time, classroom
teachers
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 will be completely replaced by
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. From my perspective, I entirely disagree with that statement.
Technology
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, unlike humans, lacks emotions and has limited teaching methods. On the one hand, the lack of emotion in
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 is undeniable.
Teachers
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 do much more than just give information
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 they
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 support students emotionally and build strong relationships with them. A human teacher can understand how a student feels, encourage them when they get troubled.
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, a student who is having a difficult time with a subject might need a teacher’s empathy, which a computer can’t provide.
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 important reason why
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 cannot replace human
teachers
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 is the lack of emotion.
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,
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programmed
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 to assist humans, in
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 of operations of knowledge, making teaching more convenient and easier. But
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 cannot
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 its own method for teaching without human programming.
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, a human teacher can have some essential
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skills to
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 guide the conversation, challenge ideas or inspire new thoughts. Meanwhile, the
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 doesn't have
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 creativity as same as humans. As
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 result, we can see there are clear limits to how
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 can teach compared to human
teachers
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. In conclusion, even though
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 is very useful in education and will continue to grow, I do not believe it will ever fully replace human
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. The human touch, including emotional support and flexible teaching skills, makes
teachers
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 irreplaceable.
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,
technology
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 should be seen as a helpful tool to improve learning, not as something that can completely take over the role of educators.

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Make sure to clearly state your main point in the introduction. Add a sentence by saying why the main point is important.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each paragraph has a clear main idea and connects to the main point of your essay. Use linking words to help with flow.
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Add more examples or details to support your points better. This makes your argument stronger.
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Your introduction clearly states your position against replacing teachers with technology.
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You provided examples of how teachers support students emotionally, which is a strong point.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • progressively
  • substituted
  • prevalent
  • crucial
  • enhance
  • support
  • guidance
  • interaction
  • personal touch
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