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Band 4.5

In future all cars, busses and tracks will be driver-less. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driver-less vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

It is often argued that automated driving vehicles are the
future
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 of
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transportation
 around the globe.
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, some
people
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 disagree that automated driving
are
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is
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 not going to happen in the near
future
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, unless
people
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 inside the car have the ability to drive it. Personally, I believe that
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the advntages
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advntages
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advantages
 of
driver-less
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driverless
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 cars
overtake
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outweigh
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disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. I will discuss it in the
the
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following
eassy
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essay
. In the beginning,
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pros of using
auto-self driving
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auto-self-driving
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 cars
has
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have
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 been noted
through
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by
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 big vehicle companies. Many companies released
a
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future
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 models
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of car
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car
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cars
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 that are fully self-driving and shared
it
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them
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 with
public
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the public
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.
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, the first advantage of using self-driving cars is the improvement
od
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of
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traffic
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the traffic
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 system.
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 step is going to develop
road
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the road
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 infrastructure and
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traffic
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the traffic
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 system.
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, the whole country will be
conneted
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connected
 to
unified
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a unified
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traffic
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 system. It will
also
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 cause less
traffic
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 congestion compared to the past, and the process will be
more smother
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smoother
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.
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, the rate of accidents will decline to achieve high safety
standars
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standards
.
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, the major disadvantage of using
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this
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these
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 high-tech vehicles will decrease
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the employement
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employement
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employment
 rate.
Mant
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 drivers are going to lose their jobs.
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,
this
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 is going to cost a lot of money for the
goverment
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government
 to implement
this
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 massive change in
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the transportion
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transportion
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transportation
 sector. In order,
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 massive change needs a global effort to
achive
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achieve
 and implement
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 idea. In conclusion, Many
people
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 are debating about
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 topic between
people
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 who agree and disagree.
However
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, the advantages of
this
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 major change can shape our
future
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 to meet a high safety
standars
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standard
.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to keep your introduction and conclusion clear and related to your main points.
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Make sure to support your points with good examples or more details to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling for clearer communication, like 'advantages' instead of 'advntages', and 'employment' instead of 'employement'.
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You clearly expressed your opinion about driver-less vehicles.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • human error
  • sensors
  • algorithms
  • traffic congestion
  • mobility
  • emissions
  • automation
  • professional drivers
  • ethical dilemmas
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • dependability
  • vulnerability
  • hacking
  • liability
  • insurance models
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