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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The places specified in the maps
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the
differential
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 between both current and new urban design of the Norbiton city. At first glance, it is evident that there has been a dramatic change in places, adding
in
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current
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the current
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 scheme. Another interesting point is that there
has
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 been
a
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several housing
accommodation
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 in comparison with the past. Turning to the first and old plot,
it is clear that
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 there
was
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 only five places which has been allocated to factories
across
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along
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 the right path.
In addition
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, there
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another
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three
factories
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other factories
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,
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locating
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 around the square. Glancing to the left side indicates the town. Looking
to
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 the second but the new map, at
first,
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it can be seen that the housing has been
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 with factories.
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, there
was
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another
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two new paths, adding to the top and the
left hand
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 side of the map. It is safe to say that there
has been
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was
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 a school which was located
in
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on
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 the right side of the main square.
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Further more
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, the river
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also
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is also
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 divided
to
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 two
s
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sections
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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