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The chart shows global emissions of greenhouse gases in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. You must You should spend around 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows global emissions of greenhouse gases in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. You must You should spend around 20 minutes on this task.
The pie
chart
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illustreats
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illustrates
 Global Greenhouse Gas Emissions by Economic sector (Electricity and
heat
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production
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,
Agriculture
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Forestry
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, Forestry
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 and other
land
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use
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, Buildings,
Transportation
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, and
industry
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)in 2016.
Overall
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,from the pie
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chart
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chart,
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 it can
clearly
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be clearly
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see
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seen
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 that the figures
indecated
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indicated
 showed the high numbers in
Electeicity
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Electricity
 and
heat
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production
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,
Agriculture
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Forestry
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, Forestry
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 and other
land
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use
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, and
Industry
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.
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in
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In
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 contrast , the numbers were lower in Building, and
Transportation
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. Looking at the pie
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chart
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chart,
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 we can
nootice
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notice
that the highest number was in
Electeicity
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Electricity
 and
heat
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production
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 with 25% ,
This
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 is followed by
Agriculture
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Forestry
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, Forestry
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 and other
land
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use
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 with 24%.
Next
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Next,
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Industry
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 and
transportation
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 by 21% and 14% respectively. After that
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, bulildings
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bulildings
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buildings
 which came
the
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apply
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last
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 given economic
sctor
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sector
 with 6%.
in
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In
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 conclusion,
it is clear that
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altough
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although
 the
chart
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 showed high levels in
Electeicity
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Electricity
 and
heat
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production
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,
Agriculture
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Forestry
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, Forestry
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 and other
land
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use
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, and
Industry
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.
However
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, it
is
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apply
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also
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showed
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shows
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 the lower levels in Building
,
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apply
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 and
Transportation
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, heat, production, agriculture, forestry, land, use, transportation, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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