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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2020

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2020
The given table demonstrates the percentage of consumer expenditure on three
categories
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 — food/drinks/tobacco, clothing/footwear, and leisure/education — in five countries (
Ireland
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, Italy,
Spain
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,
Sweden
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, and
Turkey
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) in 2020. At
the
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first glance, it was patently evident that, among the
categories
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 of food/ drink/ tobacco and clothing/ footwear and leisure/ education, the first
category
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 had more consumers in comparison with the other
categories
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 across the countries shown in the table. The most significant proportion of consumers in food/ drink/ tobacco belonged to
Turkey
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 , almost a third. And
Ireland
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 followed in second place.
In contrast
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,
Sweden
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, Italy and
Spain
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 had positions respectively ascending.
Also
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, it was reported that
Ireland
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,
Spain
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 and
Turkey
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 had the same figure around 6% in clothing/ footwear. Italy had the highest spending,
while
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Sweden
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 had the lowest in
this
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category
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.
In addition
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, we could mention that leisure/education accounted for the lowest proportion of consumer spending among the three
categories
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.
Furthermore
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, Italy and
Sweden
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 were the same approximately 3% in
this
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category
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.
Turkey
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 in the
last
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category
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 had the highest number ,
while
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Spain
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 and
Ireland
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 had
less
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fewer
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 than others.
Also
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, in comparison with each
category
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 in the whole
countries
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country
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. Generally, it was transparent
Turkey
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 with 32.14% was most popular to consume , and
Spain
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 with 1.98% was not as well-known in 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, ireland, spain, sweden, turkey, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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