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You share a parking area with several neighbors and have recently started having problems. Write a letter to be copied to all neighbors that share the parking area. In that letter • explaining the problems • suggesting ways to help the situation • proposing a possible meeting

Respected Neighbours, I hope
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 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am your
next door
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next-door
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 neighbour. I am writing
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 letter to highlight a few issues
,
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 which I am facing
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 because of the parking lot that we share.
To begin
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 with, there are a number of issues.
Firstly
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, vehicles are not parked in a right way, and I usually arrive home very late.
Therefore
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, sometimes I do not get enough
space
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 to park my vehicle.
Secondly
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, for the
last
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 couple of days, parking lot is being used to keep extra household items
such
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 as
,
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 chairs, tables, etc, which is utilising the parking
space
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. In order to resolve the issues, I urge you
people
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to kindly park your cars in
a
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the
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 right way so that everyone
could
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 use
this
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space
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. Adding more to it, kindly do not keep household items in the parking lot, because it is consuming the
space
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 of a vehicle.
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, I propose a meeting on coming Sunday so that we could discuss these
matter
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 in detail, and try to resolve
it
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them
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. I hope to see you soon, and I am looking forward to have a positive response from your side. Best wishes, Jatinder.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate your points in each paragraph. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea only.
Task Response
You might want to include a clear statement of the main issue at the start. This helps the readers know what to expect.
Task Response
Consider using a more formal tone throughout, and try to be more polite in your requests.
Task Response
Your letter has a clear purpose and addresses the main issues well.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate for the context.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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