The diagram illustrates the process how to produce liquid chocolate. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram illustrates the process how to produce liquid chocolate. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram illustrates the process how to produce liquid chocolate. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The flow chart shows the way ripe red pods from
cacao
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the cacao
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tree
processed
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are processed
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into liquid chocolate.
Overall
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, there are 10 stages in the whole chocolate producing process, beginning with harvesting white cocoa
beans
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and ending with pressing
inner
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the inner
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parts.
To begin
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, white cocoa
beans
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, which are grown in South America, Africa, and Indonesia, are harvested from the ripe red pods. Before the
beans
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are fermented, they are spread out in the sun to dry.
Next
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Next,
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they are put in large sacks, and each
sacks
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sack
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is weighted on a scale. Followed by
this
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, they are transported by train or lorry to
factory
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the factory
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. In the subsequent stage,
beans
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are roasted
in
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at
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temperature
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a temperature
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360°
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of 360°
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.
Following
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this
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,
beans
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are crushed, and
outer
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the outer
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shell
removed
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is removed
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.
Finally
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,
inner
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the inner
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part
are
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is
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pressed and liquid chocolate
produced
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is produced
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words beans with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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