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Theprocess shows how to produce liquid chocolate Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The flow chart illustrates the process by which ripe red pods from the cacao tree are transformed into liquid
chocolate
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,
chocolate
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 production involves ten stages, starting with the harvesting of white cocoa
beans
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 and culminating in the pressing of the inner parts to produce liquid
chocolate
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Initially
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, white cocoa
beans
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, which are cultivated in South America, Africa, and Indonesia, are harvested from ripe red pods. Once collected, the
beans
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 undergo fermentation and are
subsequently
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 spread out in the sun to dry. They are
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 packed into large sacks, each of which is weighed on a scale, after which they are transported to the factory by train or lorry. In the next
phases
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, the
beans
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 are roasted at a temperature of 360°C. They are
then
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 crushed, and their outer shells are removed, leaving the inner parts.
Finally
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, these inner parts are pressed, thereby producing liquid
chocolate
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task response
Make sure to clearly identify the main stages of the process and explain them in a logical order. You can add more details to some stages.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words to connect your ideas better, which will help the reader follow your description more easily.
positive aspect
You clearly describe the main stages of the chocolate production process, which is a good start.

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