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The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.
The given maps illustrate a plan of an office structure in
present
Correct article usage
the present
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 and plans for its future
redesigned
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.   
Overall
Linking Words
, it
predicted
Verb problem
is predicted
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to
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that
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layout
Correct article usage
the layout
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 of an office building
redeveloped
Verb problem
will be redeveloped
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 and
location
Correct article usage
the location
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 of some buildings will
replaced
Verb problem
be replaced
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.    In present,  there is a
kitchen
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 near the
grass
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in
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on
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north
Correct article usage
the north
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 side. There is a garden between
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kitchen
Correct article usage
the kitchen
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 and
storeroom
Correct article usage
the storeroom
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. 4 offices are situated next to the
grass
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 and
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entrance
Correct article usage
the entrance
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 to the sought. Near the
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entrance
Add a comma
entrance,
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 there is
grass
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in
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on
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 the east side.     In future, the locations of these buildings will
Verb problem
be redisgned
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redisgned
Correct your spelling
redesigned
. The outside eating area will be built
instead
Linking Words
 of
grass
Use synonyms
.  
Use synonyms
kitchen
Correct article usage
The kitchen
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 and garden will be transformed
to
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into
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 two offices to the north. The storeroom and
entrance
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 located
to
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apply
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adjacent to the
Use synonyms
kitchen
Punctuation problem
kitchen,
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 will be unchanged. There will be
meeting
Correct article usage
a meeting
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 area and chairs
instead
Linking Words
 of
grass
Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
on
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 the east side. The location of
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entrance
Correct article usage
the entrance
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 will
be remained
Wrong verb form
remain
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, but
It
Fix capitalization
it
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 will be
removed
Verb problem
moved
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 to
east
Correct article usage
the east
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kitchen, grass, entrance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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